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cool. I like were the story is heading (I've only read the first chapter so far).
But I do have a few quries.
First he says stuff out loud that he could just think in his head.
Second, the drug could be in it's testing stage and so if he filled out a form be could be in the experiment (it's not suspices) this happens with all drugs, it's a legal requirment before it is sold on the market.
third if he didn't want to take the drug he could have just called the hospical.
I'm not saying the story is bad, or that you should change these thing, they just kind of stuck out in my mind and I thought I might tell you.
Anyway, I think I'll come back and read more later.
Looking forward to it.
Thanks for the comments! I love hearing things whether good or bad about my stories! :) It's even better when someone critiques one or more of them as that's the only way I can get better or catch my mistakes.
